Hey, guys! I've been writing a story called The Witches' Assassin! It has characters based on people/beliefs that I've had in my life! Be prepared for a ride with adventure, fantasy, truth, romance, drama, and humor! Expecting the unexpected isn't what it's about, but the world isn't all as it seems!
Melody twisted in the shadows, suffocating. Cold and afraid she cried, “Traitor! Let me go! Let me free! Let me be!”
Tears streamed down her face and she tried to reach out of the shadows, “Help me! Please! Mercy!”
Suddenly a shout of victory echoed as if in a far off land and light pierced the
darkness like a blade forged in the Heavenly Kingdom. A sweet song of a
marching army, marching on to the victorious beats of love rang all
around her and became nearer and closer as the light grew brighter. Two
hands pulled her out of the shadows as she fell into the embrace of a
warm cloak. Honey-brown curls cascaded into Melody’s face as deep
sea-green eyes delved into hers.
“In
the name of Jeshua, you will depart from these parts, Sorion!” a firm
voice of one with authority spoke in the blurred forest. A scream of
agony as Sorion sounded his retreat.
Melody’s
body, exerted and in agony slumped onto the girl’s shoulder, as her
weight started sliding to the ground. Blackness engulfed her vision once
more and she saw no more.
I hope you guys enjoyed it! Give me critique! TIPS! TIPS! TIIIIIIPS! :-D
Preferring to look insane,
Mari J. Fahel
gee, I just WONDER who that could be ;P
ReplyDeleteWho dost thou speaketh of, oh brother of mine? There are four people mentioned in this snippet! x3 A man's voice, a girl's face, Melody and Sorion! Who dost thou speaketh of?
DeleteWow! Very interesting!
ReplyDeleteVery well written. And a good beginning. It gets the reader right in!
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